Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Yasanagi]

Spoiler for Oh, hey... KM again:

Apparently... whenever is today.

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Tonight was going to be a treat for the little Vivio.

When she made her first trip to Earth and met Nanoha-mama’s family, she also discovered the glory of onsens, those special baths that somehow made all the stresses of the day go away. That quickly rose to the top of her personal list of ‘awesome things on Earth’ right next to the pastries that her grandparents baked.

So when she heard that a new onsen had been opened in the city, she wanted to give it a try. Nanoha had also been curious about whether they managed to truly capture the onsen experience so they went together that evening to check it out. Once they got changed and headed to the women’s bathing area with their own soaps and towels, they spotted a pair of familiar faces.

“Ollie-chan! Onii-chan!” Vivio immediately recognized her older counterpart, seated on one of those mini stools placed behind Touma. She only wore a towel on top of her head to keep her blonde hair tied tightly and was in the middle of scrubbing her son with some soap. As for the boy himself, he only had a small towel around his waist and had his eyes directly focused on the floor so that he wouldn’t see anything inappropriate.

“Fancy meeting you here!” greeted Olivie.

“What’s wrong with Touma-kun? He looks quite tired,” noted Nanoha.

“He was knocked out of the Inter-Middle earlier today. His body just needs time to recover which is why I’m helping him bathe today. Carim suggested I take him here so that the hot water would help him relax better.” The young woman paused for a moment to apply some more soap against the brush before resuming scrubbing her son’s back. “And lucky for me that Touma’s still within the age limit where he can come into the women’s section of the bath without anyone making a major fuss.”

“I wish they did make a fuss though,” grumbled the boy, causing Nanoha to laugh.

“Nyahaha! He reminds me of how Erio-kun reacted when Caro dragged him into our side of the bath last year!” She pulled up some stools for herself and her daughter to use while Vivio trotted over to the boy.

“You were in the Inter-Middle? How was it like?”

“Interesting, tiring, exhilarating and painful,” answered Touma. “Right now, I feel like I went through a meat tenderizer. Every part of my body feels pretty sore.”

“Really?” Vivio brought up her tiny index finger on her right hand and poked his shoulder.

“Ow. Quit it.”

Poke.

“Ow! Quit it!”

“Vivio.” Upon hearing her mother call her name in a stern tone, the smaller girl backed off.

“Sorry!” Before she went back to her mother, she addressed the boy again. “Onii-chan, can you tell me more about the Inter-Middle went for you a little later?”

“Sure, if you want.” He winced a bit as his mother dumped water all over him to rinse the lather away.

“Now that you’re cleaned up, it’s time for a dip!” As Olivie picked up her son bridal style to carry him over to the hot springs water, he immediately closed his eyes and tried not to think about the sensation of her impressive bared bosom pressing into his left arm. A moment after he was inserted into the hot water, he felt some of the throbbing his body experienced melt away.

“Whoa… this is pretty good.”

“I know, right?” replied his mother cheerfully as she took a spot right beside him. Five minutes later, the other mother and child duo joined them in the hot water. Vivio immediately made her way over and planted herself on the other side of Touma.

“So tell me about the tournament! Was there anyone really scary there?”

“Well, there was this lady who really had an interesting sword drawing style. In the blink of an eye, she could easily cut you down for a lot of damage-” He was cut off by hearing the sound of someone surfacing in front of the group. She had a basic blue bikini on. As for her hair colour, it was the same as her eyes which looked blue-green.

“Sister Sein!”

The reformed Number waved cheerfully at Vivio. “Yaho~! Sorry to disturb your evening but I have something here for Her Majesty… er, the big one to sign. Once we get her signature, we can begin the process right away.”

A mini vid screen appeared before the blonde woman who reviewed it quickly before she signed off on it while the Ace of Aces was able to spot the header of the legal document from her position. “That’s a deed to a house? You don’t like living in the Church?”

“It’s not that I don’t like it but it seems overly formal at times and nothing like how we lived back on Vaizen. There’s a lack of coziness there so that’s why I asked Carim to look into getting a new home for us.”

“Wait! I recognize that address! That’s right next door to our house!” exclaimed Nanoha.

A huge smile appeared on Vivio’s face upon hearing that. “So Ollie-chan and Onii-chan will be our neighbours! Yay!”

“Now that this is signed, we can go ahead with acquiring the furnishings. The vendors should be by the new house to drop everything off one week from now starting at noon,” said Sein as she took back the signed document. “Also, Carim just finalized a meeting date for Her Big Majesty with the College of Cardinals. It will be four days from now, 2 PM at the Grand Cathedral’s boardroom.”

“I see. Thank you for letting me know.”

“This is a first. Sister Sein’s not acting very mischievous. She’s being all serious,” chirped Vivio, which got Touma curious.

“What type of mischief does she get in normally?”

“The kind that has no respect for personal space based on what Schach told me,” came Nanoha’s flat reply.

“Normally, I would have tried a grope on anyone else. Since it’s you two here… let’s say my sense of self preservation quashed any urges I may have had to grope anyone here,” explained Sein with a grin. “I am very much alive and I would like to stay that way.”

“Wise decision,” said the older blonde woman calmly.

With her business now done, Sein bowed once again before triggering her Deep Diver to go back the way she came from while something else stayed with Nanoha for a bit, causing her to get lost in thought.

‘That moving date… isn’t that the same day when Fate-chan’s shore leave begins?’

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There you go: some fanservice, plot development and plot hooks all in one.
Next time: Fate-chan freaks out.

[Yasanagi]

Spoiler for More KM... and at this rate, this might as well be the last update I do on AS considering how dead the fanfic thread is:

Fate T. Harlaown had been looking forward to the beginning of her leave for a long time.

The investigation into an organized crime family that operated in the Zynga Cluster had essentially occupied her full attention for the past year. It had been an extremely difficult case to crack until an informant came along two months ago. During that period, she and her aide Teana had spent every waking second pouring over leads, interviewing persons of interest mentioned by the informant and going on late night stake outs to try and pick up suspect movements.

As an extra precaution, their superior had ordered that they maintain a communications blackout with Mid-Childa which meant no calls back home and no checking personal messages from home so that the focus would be on the case. It did make Fate feel guilty not being able to call home and talk with Vivio for those past two months but this was necessary in order to maximize the efficiency of the sting operation.

For the most part, the sting had been a success with several illegal operations shut down and key members of the Killjoy Syndicate arrested. The Bureau had missed the head of the group but at the least, this sting allowed them to weaken the family’s hold over the Zynga Cluster. In recognition of her efforts, Teana had been recommended for a promotion to a full time Enforcer. Fate had no doubt that the experience from this case would serve the other young woman well in her future work.

Once they had been officially dismissed from active duty, they immediately packed their belongings before being escorted to a transport going back to Mid-Childa. Due to the adrenaline rush from the sting wearing off, the pair finally caught up on their sleep and ended up waking just before they reached their destination. Teana’s next stop was to her brother’s grave to pay her respects while Fate drove off to Nanoha’s house so that she could surprise the mother and daughter duo.

But as soon as her vehicle turned on that street, she noticed several moving vans and trucks surrounding a house that was next door to Nanoha’s. ‘It looks like someone is moving in.’

Once Fate parked her car on Nanoha’s driveway, she made her way to the door while a mover pressed the other house’s doorbell to let the inhabitant inside know that they arrived. Just as she inserted her key to open the door, she heard the other door open and a familiar voice speak to the mover.

“Hello! Which one are you?”

‘What…?’ Fate turned her head around just in time to see another young woman with blonde hair tied in tight bun step out of the other house. She wore a pair of jeans and a plain blue t-shirt that looked a little dirty, likely from handling boxes during the day. What stood out the most was her heterochromia.

“We’re here to drop off your living room set, madam,” answered the mover while the Enforcer just stared in disbelief at what she was seeing.

‘V-Vivio?!’ In surprise, Fate dropped her briefcase on the ground.

“Ah, go ahead! Let me help get this in too!” With that, the older Vivio exited her house and headed straight towards the moving van to pick up a box. “Whatever you bring in, you can set them down on the left!”

“No problem.”

Fate tried to get her mouth working again but nothing came out. Her eyes stayed glued on Vivio and that mover bringing boxes into the other house. She didn’t even notice the door in front of her opening to reveal a smiling Nanoha, freshly changed from work into an apron to do some baking. “Fate-chan, welcome home!”

“N-n-n…!”

The Ace of Aces quickly grew concerned at the strange way her best friend was acting. “What’s wrong?”

“BWWEEEHHHH!” In a flash, the blonde Enforcer clung to the other woman like a lifeline. “It’s my fault, Nanoha!”

“Huh?! Get a hold of yourself, Fate-chan! What are you talking about?”

“I didn’t call Vivio for the past two months and now, she’s isolated herself from us! She’s moved out of the house to live on her own and she’s in her Kaiser Form to be seen as a grown up and it’s all because of me! BWWEEEHHHH!”

“Fate-chan…” Fate felt Nanoha cup her head to direct it towards her. For a few seconds, the two women kept their gazes on one another until…

“… Do I need to cool your head a bit?” Although Nanoha’s smile stayed perfectly intact, the other female clearly got the message and gulped nervously.

“That’s… not necessary.” She already got blasted by Starlight Breaker once and that was more than enough to last a lifetime, thank you very much!

“Good!” Nanoha released Fate’s face before stepping back. “Now I sent you a message about this last month. Didn’t you get it?”

“Well… I was under a communications blackout for the last two months because of the Killjoy Syndicate case,” admitted Fate which caused the other woman to sigh in irritation.

“Did you at least check your messages when the blackout was lifted?”

“Um… it slipped my mind…” Seeing the annoyed look from Nanoha, Fate held up her hands defensively. “I was very tired you know!”

“I’m home!”

‘Wait a minute…!’ Fate turned around to see her little Vivio walking up with a boy close to her with short brown hair.

“Ah, welcome home, Fate-mama!”

The boy looked over at Fate briefly before asking the smaller girl a question. “She’s your other mom?”

Before she could answer, she felt herself hugged tightly by her Fate-mama. “Vivio, I’m so glad to be home! I’m so, so sorry for not calling home for the last two months!”

“Ara… what’s with this ruckus out here?” Fate then looked up just in time to see the older looking Vivio pop out of the other house. “How was school, Touma-kun?”

“It was fine, mom,” answered Touma, not even noticing the seriously shocked look on the other blonde woman’s face.

‘T-two of them?!’ While Fate struggled to handle this revelation, Vivio wiggled out of her arms.

“Oh! Let me introduce you to Ollie-chan! She’s my blood mama or blood sister or something like that! Ollie-chan, this is my Fate-mama!”

The older Vivio’s eyes narrowed briefly to examine the blonde Enforcer. “My first impression of you… is that you’re an overreacting blubbering wreck.”

“Hweh?!”

“Nyahaha… that’s harsh there, Olivie-san,” said Nanoha, coming to Fate’s defense. “Fate-chan has always been a bit sensitive when it comes to family matters.”

“And she’s supposed to be Vivio’s other parent figure?” Olivie shook her head and glanced back at the van before addressing Fate one last time. “After I finish getting our stuff into the house, you and I are going to have a little chat.”

“Mom, let me help!” With that, Touma went over to the other side while Nanoha picked up the fallen briefcase.

“Nanoha, you called her… Olivie?”

“Yep! She’s the last Saint King and Vivio’s biological mother,” answered the other woman.

All of a sudden, Fate was really not looking forward to that chat. ‘What a way to start shore leave…’

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Next time: An interview

[Twi]

I forgot to post it, but the second chapter of my Yuuno Fanfic was released: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1083889...rya-Chronicles

[WarpObscura]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for More KM... and at this rate, this might as well be the last update I do on AS considering how dead the fanfic thread is:

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Where else is it available?

[Yasanagi]

Spacebattles and The Fanfiction Forum.

[WarpObscura]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spacebattles and The Fanfiction Forum.

This one?

[Yasanagi]

Yes, that's my SB thread.

[Saluki]

Hello all. Hopefully someone could help since I'm at the end of the rope here. I'm looking for archive of the fanfic "The Name of War" by Allquall. It used to be posted on fanfiction.net but the author had deleted all of her stories from there. I knew about Allquall from this thread back in 2009 and love her writing a lot, so I'm desperate to read them again.

[Gx Hero]

then let me help you out. It has been taken down of fanfiction and removed from this site.


Personally though I'd like to see more hayate fanfics without hayate trying to face off against politics, or aiming or being higher in command because her problems are always the same. I still feel bad that she seems to be a bombardment only mage limiting the fighting she dose.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

then let me help you out. It has been taken down of fanfiction and removed from this site.


Personally though I'd like to see more hayate fanfics without hayate trying to face off against politics, or aiming or being higher in command because her problems are always the same. I still feel bad that she seems to be a bombardment only mage limiting the fighting she dose.

Then I guess a way to keep hayate away from the "bombardment only" category would be to give her the abilities she has in the psp games

[novalysis]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Then I guess a way to keep hayate away from the "bombardment only" category would be to give her the abilities she has in the psp games

I wonder how Striker S would have turned out, in the Battle of Aces Continuity. I am still quite sure that Nanoha would be severely wounded at age 12 by Scagaletti's Drones - unless in the BoA continuity, she was forewarned of that incident by Vivio (assuming Vivio knew of it). It would, at least make for an interesting fanfiction - a world where the Battle of Aces occurred, but Scagaletti's plans are still in motion.

[vic-vic]

Then, we could have Materials for extra fun

[Gx Hero]

For Fanfictions we can always have Materials fun, just have them on their own world. I mean the place is littered with lost logia from their past civilization and minsters

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

For Fanfictions we can always have Materials fun, just have them on their own world. I mean the place is littered with lost logia from their past civilization and minsters

Their own world, as in the one in GoD?

Meanwhile, I'm still charging up on willpower to continue my fanfic, a Belka arc that I should be eager to work on...and yet I keep getting distracted by other things.
Need to focus

[Van Silverlight]

I'm still wondering why there are no fanfiction about Reinforce Eins not sacrifice herself/continue to live? Does it really impossible?

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Van Silverlight

I'm still wondering why there are no fanfiction about Reinforce Eins not sacrifice herself/continue to live? Does it really impossible?

IIRC, to be able to prevent Reinforce Eins' sacrifice, you'd need to find a way to eliminate the corruption in her program, which causes her to go berserk.
A solution for that would be a back-up copy of the original Tome of the Night Sky

Funny enough, my fanfic has a character with an ability that just might be able to do that
(I should really get to writing it... )

[Twi]

Well, there was the one 'There will be blood', I think anyway. The Slayers Crossover. Lina Inverse managed to purge her of it.

[Gx Hero]

THere was a cross over with Negima where the corruption program was destroyed.

THe question is will it make sense since you really can't have a super powered person come by and do it. Even in shadow Crystal mages story nanohao f 2814 where that is possible it still has to fit the story.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

THere was a cross over with Negima where the corruption program was destroyed.

THe question is will it make sense since you really can't have a super powered person come by and do it. Even in shadow Crystal mages story nanohao f 2814 where that is possible it still has to fit the story.

Yeah, that's the issue with most fics.
You can't just have a super-powered character waltz in, snap his/her fingers and there, problem solved.

In my case, it's a relatively harmless Lost Logia that is being kept under the Grand Cathedral in the Belka Self-Governed Region

[Van Silverlight]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Yeah, that's the issue with most fics.
You can't just have a super-powered character waltz in, snap his/her fingers and there, problem solved.

In my case, it's a relatively harmless Lost Logia that is being kept under the Grand Cathedral in the Belka Self-Governed Region

So, if "somehow" The Infinity Library has the scraps of BOD clean data, we can use that to return BOD data to its previous state or at least halt the Automatic Defense Program from controlling Reinforce