(L) Overlord [LN]

[DeathMetalBunny]

This seems like a quite interesting series. I like what I have been able to read so far thanks to the genrious translators and summaries. My most sincere and heartfelt thanks.

It starts off with the videogame start and ventures off into fantasy. Rather than an OP hero MC it feels more like a OP villan MC and that has a pleant twist to the read that helps diferintiate from the ever growing genra of videogame world based stories.

[Rahuman]

Originally Posted by Ap1001

here is the chinese raw for vol 1 and 2, and japanese raw for volume 4 and 5 if you want it.
http://www.wenku8.cn/novel/1/1592/index.htm
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1qW8stFu
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1jGsmHLk

Thank you and putting this in the first post, I don't know why but I feel so evil after seeing the illustration.

[Ap1001]

The raw for vol 2 is missing two pics. I'll update them later.

[Mimix]

And the first actual chapter is out.


I would like to say sorry for various things.
First of all due to first posting it now(well various happened yesterday and the day before).
And for it being so messy(had various summarizing problems, and ended up with a short summary, a very detailed one, and even a somewhat partial translation :/)

[Ap1001]

Originally Posted by Mimix

And the first actual chapter is out.


I would like to say sorry for various things.
First of all due to first posting it now(well various happened yesterday and the day before).
And for it being so messy(had various summarizing problems, and ended up with a short summary, a very detailed one, and even a somewhat partial translation :/)

Thanks Mimix

[CoCayn]

Since chapter 2 part 4 is huuuuge, Ghoststaker and I are gonna both work on it. We will try to release everything by the end of this week (If we can't finish it, we will release half). Namorax will be our editor/proofreader from now on

[obnuchious]

Originally Posted by CoCayn

Since chapter 2 part 4 is huuuuge, Ghoststaker and I are gonna both work on it. We will try to release everything by the end of this week (If we can't finish it, we will release half). Namorax will be our editor/proofreader from now on

Chapter 2 of Volume 1?

[CoCayn]

Originally Posted by obnuchious

Chapter 2 of Volume 1?

Yes, the last part of Chapter 2 of Volume 1

[Namorax]

Hi everyone,
I'm Namoax and CoCayn was willing to give me a chance as an Editor for Overlord. I'll try to give it my best to offer a smooth read, but since I can't read chinese/japanese my skills might be limited.

If I make a blunder (or you think a certain sentence can be improved), feel free to post it here and I'll have a look at it.

In order to kill some time until I get to work on part 4, I decided to start at the beginning (c1p2) and see what I can do. If I screw up over the course of my editing, feel free to point out my mistakes.

Spoiler for things I noticed and thought about during my editing:

1)The chinese Illustrations calls Momonga's home "Underground large Grave of Nazarick". It's not exactly clear to me if Nazarick is the name of a Region or if Nazarick is the person who was buried in there. Since all I have to work with are ~2 chapters (out of 5 vols), I'll continue with the following assumptions:
-1a)Nazarick was the name of a person, meaning Momongas base is "the grave of the person called Nazarick" and not "the grave situated in a region called Nazarick"
-1b)Since "Underground large Grave of Nazarick" is quite a handful and "Grand Underground Tomb" is a bit lacking as a name, I'll replace the name with "The Great Tomb of Nazarick". It has gravitas and it sounds more sinister then Mausoleum or any other alternative I can think of atm.
It also sounds like the name a Dungeon would have (consider the great raid that was organised to "conquer" it) which is another reason for me to go with this name. The whole guild consisted of "monsters" and where else would monsters live if not in a dungeon?

2)The 7th floor of Nazaricks Tomb appears to be a fiery hell. Will later chapters offer more information about it? The current term for it is "underground magma" and the illustration calls it "lava". The best I can think of would be to call this floor "the underground volcano"

3)

"The maid is an NPC and acts according to a AI designed action."

The last part of this sentence needs rephrasing, but I have no idea how to do this properly (it's 4 am). If anyone has a suggestion I'd be happy to hear one.

4)I changed

In Yggdrasil, if your guild advances the base of the castle, you can get a number of special benefits. One of it is a base of NPC protection.

into

In Yggdrasil, improving a guild’s base to the rank of ‘castle’ provides a number of benefits. One of these benefits are NPC protectors.

This is a very loose rephrasing and I'd like to hear the opinion of someone who can read the raws. Is this change still reasonable or have I changed the meaning too much?

PS: My personal opinion is that a translator/editor should try to stay as close to the original meaning as possible. Most of the times a literal translations is impossible due to cultural differences but as long as the meaning is properly conveyed you can consider it a job well done. Which is why I'll tend to ask multiple questions and/or look for more information before commiting to a certain changes.

[CoCayn]

Originally Posted by Namorax

Hi everyone,
I'm Namoax and CoCayn was willing to give me a chance as an Editor for Overlord. I'll try to give it my best to offer a smooth read, but since I can't read chinese/japanese my skills might be limited.

If I make a blunder (or you think a certain sentence can be improved), feel free to post it here and I'll have a look at it.

In order to kill some time until I get to work on part 4, I decided to start at the beginning (c1p2) and see what I can do. If I screw up over the course of my editing, feel free to point out my mistakes.

Spoiler for things I noticed and thought about during my editing:

1)The chinese Illustrations calls Momonga's home "Underground large Grave of Nazarick". It's not exactly clear to me if Nazarick is the name of a Region or if Nazarick is the person who was buried in there. Since all I have to work with are ~2 chapters (out of 5 vols), I'll continue with the following assumptions:
-1a)Nazarick was the name of a person, meaning Momongas base is "the grave of the person called Nazarick" and not "the grave situated in a region called Nazarick"
-1b)Since "Underground large Grave of Nazarick" is quite a handful and "Grand Underground Tomb" is a bit lacking as a name, I'll replace the name with "The Great Tomb of Nazarick". It has gravitas and it sounds more sinister then Mausoleum or any other alternative I can think of atm.
It also sounds like the name a Dungeon would have (consider the great raid that was organised to "conquer" it) which is another reason for me to go with this name. The whole guild consisted of "monsters" and where else would monsters live if not in a dungeon?

2)The 7th floor of Nazaricks Tomb appears to be a fiery hell. Will later chapters offer more information about it? The current term for it is "underground magma" and the illustration calls it "lava". The best I can think of would be to call this floor "the underground volcano"

3)The last part of this sentence needs rephrasing, but I have no idea how to do this properly (it's 4 am). If anyone has a suggestion I'd be happy to hear one.

4)I changed
into This is a very loose rephrasing and I'd like to hear the opinion of someone who can read the raws. Is this change still reasonable or have I changed the meaning too much?

PS: My personal opinion is that a translator/editor should try to stay as close to the original meaning as possible. Most of the times a literal translations is impossible due to cultural differences but as long as the meaning is properly conveyed you can consider it a job well done. Which is why I'll tend to ask multiple questions and/or look for more information before commiting to a certain changes.

From now, both our release speed and quality will improve greatly

[Mimix]

Originally Posted by Namorax

Hi everyone,
I'm Namoax and CoCayn was willing to give me a chance as an Editor for Overlord. I'll try to give it my best to offer a smooth read, but since I can't read chinese/japanese my skills might be limited.

If I make a blunder (or you think a certain sentence can be improved), feel free to post it here and I'll have a look at it.

In order to kill some time until I get to work on part 4, I decided to start at the beginning (c1p2) and see what I can do. If I screw up over the course of my editing, feel free to point out my mistakes.

Spoiler for things I noticed and thought about during my editing:

1)The chinese Illustrations calls Momonga's home "Underground large Grave of Nazarick". It's not exactly clear to me if Nazarick is the name of a Region or if Nazarick is the person who was buried in there. Since all I have to work with are ~2 chapters (out of 5 vols), I'll continue with the following assumptions:
-1a)Nazarick was the name of a person, meaning Momongas base is "the grave of the person called Nazarick" and not "the grave situated in a region called Nazarick"
-1b)Since "Underground large Grave of Nazarick" is quite a handful and "Grand Underground Tomb" is a bit lacking as a name, I'll replace the name with "The Great Tomb of Nazarick". It has gravitas and it sounds more sinister then Mausoleum or any other alternative I can think of atm.
It also sounds like the name a Dungeon would have (consider the great raid that was organised to "conquer" it) which is another reason for me to go with this name. The whole guild consisted of "monsters" and where else would monsters live if not in a dungeon?

2)The 7th floor of Nazaricks Tomb appears to be a fiery hell. Will later chapters offer more information about it? The current term for it is "underground magma" and the illustration calls it "lava". The best I can think of would be to call this floor "the underground volcano"

3)The last part of this sentence needs rephrasing, but I have no idea how to do this properly (it's 4 am). If anyone has a suggestion I'd be happy to hear one.

4)I changed
into This is a very loose rephrasing and I'd like to hear the opinion of someone who can read the raws. Is this change still reasonable or have I changed the meaning too much?

PS: My personal opinion is that a translator/editor should try to stay as close to the original meaning as possible. Most of the times a literal translations is impossible due to cultural differences but as long as the meaning is properly conveyed you can consider it a job well done. Which is why I'll tend to ask multiple questions and/or look for more information before commiting to a certain changes.

Hey Namorax

Spoiler for Regarding your questions:

About Nazarick, from what I got from the WN it name is something like "Underground large Grave of Nazarick" or "The Great Underground Tomb of Nazarick"(What I used), though "The Great Tomb of Nazarick" that you went with is pretty good.
Whether Nazarick is a person buried there or not, I kinda feel that's closer to something like the name of the place, just like how cities have names(Or simply the name of their dungeon/base).

The "In Yggdrasil" sentence you changed seems to be good enough.
Though can't really read the cn LN(can read chinese, but not traditional :/).
But well the WN seems to explain something like that as well(And it also feels far more natural compared to it before).

Ps. Summary for Chapter 2 should be out by today or tomorrow, if not then definetely by friday this week.
Trying to aim for something between Prologue 2 and Chapter 1 short summary. Though I guess it is likely, that it will end up like Prologue 2.

[nightmares]

Originally Posted by Namorax

Hi everyone,
I'm Namoax and CoCayn was willing to give me a chance as an Editor for Overlord. I'll try to give it my best to offer a smooth read, but since I can't read chinese/japanese my skills might be limited.

If I make a blunder (or you think a certain sentence can be improved), feel free to post it here and I'll have a look at it.

In order to kill some time until I get to work on part 4, I decided to start at the beginning (c1p2) and see what I can do. If I screw up over the course of my editing, feel free to point out my mistakes.

Spoiler for things I noticed and thought about during my editing:

1)The chinese Illustrations calls Momonga's home "Underground large Grave of Nazarick". It's not exactly clear to me if Nazarick is the name of a Region or if Nazarick is the person who was buried in there. Since all I have to work with are ~2 chapters (out of 5 vols), I'll continue with the following assumptions:
-1a)Nazarick was the name of a person, meaning Momongas base is "the grave of the person called Nazarick" and not "the grave situated in a region called Nazarick"
-1b)Since "Underground large Grave of Nazarick" is quite a handful and "Grand Underground Tomb" is a bit lacking as a name, I'll replace the name with "The Great Tomb of Nazarick". It has gravitas and it sounds more sinister then Mausoleum or any other alternative I can think of atm.
It also sounds like the name a Dungeon would have (consider the great raid that was organised to "conquer" it) which is another reason for me to go with this name. The whole guild consisted of "monsters" and where else would monsters live if not in a dungeon?

2)The 7th floor of Nazaricks Tomb appears to be a fiery hell. Will later chapters offer more information about it? The current term for it is "underground magma" and the illustration calls it "lava". The best I can think of would be to call this floor "the underground volcano"

3)The last part of this sentence needs rephrasing, but I have no idea how to do this properly (it's 4 am). If anyone has a suggestion I'd be happy to hear one.

4)I changed
into This is a very loose rephrasing and I'd like to hear the opinion of someone who can read the raws. Is this change still reasonable or have I changed the meaning too much?

PS: My personal opinion is that a translator/editor should try to stay as close to the original meaning as possible. Most of the times a literal translations is impossible due to cultural differences but as long as the meaning is properly conveyed you can consider it a job well done. Which is why I'll tend to ask multiple questions and/or look for more information before commiting to a certain changes.

Wow cool, thank you for the hard work.

[Ap1001]

thanks namorax, and to answer one of your question, Nazrick is the name of the tomb.

[Namorax]

Originally Posted by Ap1001

thanks namorax, and to answer one of your question, Nazrick is the name of the tomb.

Thanks for trying to answer, but this doesn't really cover my problem:
Let's use this as an example:

This room is the last line of defense to protect the Tomb of Nazarick's core.

After reading this, I want to go with

This room is the last line of defense to protect the core of Nazarick's Tomb.

If Nazarick is the name of a person, this would be a proper sentence, but if the dungeon's name originates from its location, then I have to use the original sentence. My issue is primarily this: is he talking about "the core of the tomb of Nazarick" or "the core of the tomb in Nazarick"? Of course, its also possible that this is "Nazarick, the Great Tomb" but tbh I think this isn't very probable since it is always called "of Nazarick".
I lack the context to decide either way, so I'd prefer to fuss over this for a while instead of having to correct everything when a later chapter reveals more information about the situation. If this is an unimportant detail then it doesn't matter if I get it wrong (except it would bother me to no end). I tend to err on the side of caution...^^ As for now, I'll just assume it is the tomb of Nazarick until I get information that debunks this notion.

And here's the next batch of editing thoughts:

Spoiler for Editing Notes for the last half of c1p2:

1)

She was a beautiful woman wearing a white dress, shallow cheeky and with a face like a goddess. In contrast with the dress, she had shiny long black hair.

My current decision is to remove the bold part. The only way to make sense of this would be to interpret this as "shallow cheeks", but since the next part of the sentence (kinda) goes into further details describing her face this part becomes unimportant/confusing. Since cheeks are usually part of the face (I doubt very much he's talking about her posterior), I dont think the author first describes one part of her face, only to summarize the whole face in the next few words. As usual, if anyone can point out what exactly is meant here I'd be grateful.

2)

He opens Albedo’s control interface, scrolls through it until he sees a command line named "She is also a slut" and stops.

I guess this is intended to confuse the reader/Momonga. If possible I'd like a translator to check this passage out and offer a comment on what exactly is written there, because it feels like a (mistaken) machinetranslation.

With this c1p2 would be finished. Feedback about the changes would be welcome, since there are places I rephrased rather liberally. In the end, I think the changes improve the reading experience and I did what I could to the best of my abilities. I'll start with c1p3 this evening and I'll probably keep posting these Editing notes for c2p1-3. Once I get c2part 4 I'll (probably) annoy ask Ghoststaker and Cocayn similar questions. Should people feel I screwed up somewhere, I downloaded the whole document in its pre-edit state. Just in case I need to undo something...

[CoCayn]

Part 4 is wholly translated and we are working on the editing. We will probably release it on Saturday or Sunday. More information to come

[nightmares]

Spoiler for :

He opens Albedo’s control interface, scrolls through it until he sees a command line named "She is also a slut" and stops.

I think that part is correct. That's why he didn't like it and changed her personality to a lover instead of a slut lol.

[Ghoststaker]

The LN is so impossibly long... Like way longer than the WN... Least it adds more detail than the WN though... Albedo (LN) being the leader is better than Demiurge (WN) in my opinion.

[Ap1001]

Originally Posted by Ghoststaker

The LN is so impossibly long... Like way longer than the WN... Least it adds more detail than the WN though... Albedo (LN) being the leader is better than Demiurge (WN) in my opinion.

Agreed, she is more resourceful and less evil.(kind of)

[CoCayn]

We need a bit help from someone who understands Chinese. This sentences is really confusing. Thanks in advance.

Spoiler for Chinese raw:

夏提雅露為僵硬的笑容，亞烏菈也是一樣，雅兒貝德則是不斷點頭贊成。
「……恐怖公啊。沒錯，也通知一下領域守護者比較好。那麼也轉告紅蓮和格蘭特等領域守護者吧。這個任務就交給各個樓層守護者 。」 Does 恐怖公啊 terrible work or a NPC called Terror Baron or something?

[Ap1001]

Originally Posted by CoCayn

We need a bit help from someone who understands Chinese. This sentences is really confusing. Thanks in advance.

Spoiler for Chinese raw:

夏提雅露為僵硬的笑容，亞烏菈也是一樣，雅兒貝德則是不斷點頭贊成。
「……恐怖公啊。沒錯，也通知一下領域守護者比較好。那麼也轉告紅蓮和格蘭特等領域守護者吧。這個任務就交給各個樓層守護者 。」 Does 恐怖公啊 terrible work or a NPC called Terror Baron or something?

I'll do it, here is the translation.
Shalltear let out a stiff smile, aura was the same (can also be translated as did the same), and albedo kept on knodding her head in agreement.
"...Count Terror. Very well, it would be the best to also notify the area guardians. Then please notify gren, grant and the other area guardian. This job is to be given to the floor guardians.

It's a name, so terror baron or count terror would work.